Let's make some edits!

Posted by Ronald Amos On Saturday, October 30, 2010 3 comments


                So I already finished reading the Iliad and I got bored with the ending. It ended with a funeral, nothing more, nothing less, just one open-ended funeral ending. It’s not that I hate peaceful endings, but I’m just a fan of action and bad-ass movies. I really wanted the ending to be more, epic. And so, the only way to change the ending is to change something in the story. I won’t just change, I’ll also add.


From http://www.davidclaudon.com/
                Remember the time that Hera seduced Zeus and puts him into sleep? This is the point where I will start my editing. Here will how my story will go: “After Hera seduced and put Zeus to a sleep, she left the room to change the tide of the battle. The other Gods eventually know that Zeus is asleep and takes the chance to attack him and dethrone him. Startled by the attack, Zeus wakes up and fights back with the other Gods. From this, a war started at Mount Olympus.  The Achaians and the Trojans keep fighting with each other, even without knowing that their Gods are at chaos. As the Gods become weak as their war passes on, Hades comes up from the underworld and unleashes the final blow that defeats Zeus. Hades throws Zeus to the underworld together with the other Gods. Hades now takes the position of Zeus at Mount Olympus and rules over it. Meanwhile, the war between the Achaians and Trojans still continues but now, without the help of the Gods”.

From http://backseatcuddler.com
                So you might be wondering why I thought this edition. First of all, I hated how the Gods intervened between the fights in war. It’s like they are having cheats on video games, humans becoming too powerful and humans turning into killing machines. But if the story should use my edition, the fights will be much based on showing who has the greater fighters between the two sides. No more Apollo-guided shots , no more Aphrodite-mist abduction, no more killing machine that strikes terror on every foe, no more instantaneous adrenaline rush and no more overpowered humans. The war will show how the two sides create strategies to defeat the other. A more balanced war will it be. And yes, I wish the boring ending could be changed in this way.

Hades became the ruler of the Olympus in my edition, why? Hades is actually 'fairer' than Zeus. Hades is often misconnected as bad, evil and such, but actually he is not like that. Hades has only one child and only one wife. Hades does not have any external or illegitimate affairs with the mortals or souls that dwell in his place, this makes Hades fit to keep the war to be balanced. Hades is not affected by the cries of the sufferers for he only does what he is assigned of, and that is to keep the souls in the Underworld. Anyways, it is really Hades rightful place in Mount Olympus since he is the eldest of the brother, it's just Zeus tricked him and got the worst pick.

So this ends my blogpost, thank you for reading and I hope you can also share to me your editions of Iliad. Happy sembreak everybody!

3 comments:

Tj Alonsagay said...

Ronald, I spotted a flaw in a certain part of your blog:
"It’s like they are having cheat on video games, humans becoming too much powerful and humans turning into killing machines."

I suggest replacing the word 'cheat' with 'cheats' to make it more appropriate and grammatically correct. Additionally, the 'too much powerful' statement is redundant, 'too' and 'much' are almost similar in meaning, so using both alongside each other just ruins the sentence.

Ronald Amos said...

Thank you, TJ. Good thing you spotted my errors first before ma'am does.

Your English Teacher said...

Score:30

An interesting twist! It highlights the fair fight between the mortals ( without the interventions of the gods.

Good job!

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